Wednesday, March 21, 2007

the eyes of the loved one

I looked into his eyes of brown

and thought that I would surely drown

for in his eyes I knew I’d find

the heart that he had stole of mine

and on my heart did take this trail

for when I would look ,so pale

I'd say this guy he is to blame

for of my life his heart I claim


5 comments:

sara said...

ya like

rokky said...

Um, ur love doesn't steal ur soul (unless he's the devil). he steals ur heart...

rokky said...

doesn't totally make sense...

Etty said...

It's pretty good but there's no rhyme pattern (r there rhyme patterns in poems?) and the bath and sould doesn't really make sense, like rokky said. I luv the first 2 lines!

rokky said...

what's up with the last line??